Pitch Wars mentors are sharing their successful queries today, so here is the query letter I sent to my amazing agent, Tricia Skinner. I wish I could share the personalized version, but I used a new online sub form at the time and I didn't save a copy.
Anyway...Here it is!
Dear Tricia Skinner,
Aileen Brooks is broke. With her father incapacitated by a mysterious illness and three siblings to feed, she’s juggling more responsibilities than her calloused hands can handle. Things only get worse when she loses her job after facing off against one of Seattle’s richest men—her father’s former boss. Desperate, Aileen puts all her hope in an interview for a full-time position as a pet sitter for three adorable dogs. There’s just one catch. Her potential boss is a mix of hard muscles, empty dark eyes and full lips that have forgotten how to smile. He’s also the son of the soul eating, money worshipping rat who fired her sick dad.
Ian Wilder hates his father for destroying his family. He thought no one would see through the old man’s facade until he met funny, dog loving, too-bright-for-his-dark-world Aileen. The brave woman not only makes him want to smile, but also makes his body remember it’s still alive. She’s a danger to the house of lies he created in order to keep his sanity. He should let her go, but his three rescue dogs are already halfway in love with her. One thing for sure, having Aileen in his house, taking care of his dogs, might be too much for his hardened heart.
For Aileen, her dream job comes with the burden of having to lie to her father and open up her heart to the son of the man she hates. For Ian, having Aileen in his life means exposing the secret he’s spent the past ten years keeping. But the more time Aileen and Ian spend together, the harder it is for them not to fall in love. Soon, they’ll have to choose between holding on to their preconceptions and the ghosts of their pasts, or holding on to each other and a chance at true love.
Complete at 97,000 words, SAY MY NAME is an #ownvoice Adult Contemporary Romance with a half-Brazilian as a leading character. I believe this story will appeal to fans of Colleen Hoover, Leisa Rayven and Kristen Callihan.
Thank you for your time and consideration.